11 second club evaluation

Here are some more evaluations of 11 second club animations


http://www.11secondclub.com/competitions/march17/winner

     The winner of this animation competition is very powerful. A well staged, well animated piece that contains elements of secondary action in the cigarette, small subtle movements and a strong sense of life and realism in their character's personalities. I noticed some slight issues in the movement of the lips but other than this, it is very strong. The squash and stretch on the character's face in the final few frames add nicely to the personality of the older character. He smirks and in this moment, his thoughts can be clearly expressed on his face. The movements of the camera between the two characters is nice and works well, establishing the story and making it easier for the viewer to follow.

     The scene itself could take place anywhere thanks to the quote and so, here is an entry that did poorly but has the same quote in order to see the difference in animation and storytelling quality between the two.


http://www.11secondclub.com/competitions/march17/entry/yEBvkx

    In comparison, this animation is very weak compared to the first one. The movements are very static and mechanical and the lip syncing is off. The camera movements are weak and the story is difficult to follow. The mouth only seems to move up and down unlike the various mouth shapes of the character in the winning entry. The facial expressions are strong but still fail to communicate a message. The best thing that I would suggest for this animator would be to look more at how the mouth moves and try to replicate the phonetics more. By looking at this animation in comparison to the first one, it is clear to see that there are some very large differences in the animators approaches.